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SnoozySloth
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I'm a straight man and this is the first time I ever read BL. Upon starting I was a bit worried. Would I catch the big gay? (That's a meme. No offense meant LGBTQ community). Fortunately, I made it through all six chapters without questioning my sexuality. Okay. All jokes aside, the story is actually quite interesting. An apocalypse mystery novel with a smart surgeon and yandere ex-prisoner BF. The BL seemed like an addition to the novel as opposed to the main story, which I appreciated. I've scored the story below: Writing Quality 3/5: The story suffers a bit here. I feel like the author might speak English as their second language? There are frequent grammatical issues that sound weird in my head when I read them. However, the author also has really good descriptions for what's happening. The grammatical mistakes are also minor enough to still easily understand what's happening. The best way I can describe it is that it reads kind of like a novel that's been translated by a newbie translator that speaks English as their 2nd language. Stability of Updates 5/5. I think updates are fairly frequent from what I can see? Seems to be a brand new novel. Story Development 5/5: The novel excels in story telling. The story is what kept me reading. Character design 5/5: Characters are interesting, but I feel they can be fleshed out a bit more. It's still early though, so I may be jumping the gun in that judgement. I hope yandere BF doesn't go full-rapist. He's already a bit creepy with how he does things. Then again, it's an apocalyptic world and he's a psychopath. Not all characters are meant to be loved. I believe the author should do what he feels is best for his story. World Background: 5/5. Just like the story, the world background is excellent. The descriptions for describing the surroundings were excellent and I felt like I could see everything vividly. Excellent work. My final thoughts for the author: Keep writing and reading. Work a bit on your English and I think the books quality will soar. The story itself was much better than I expected. If you ever move out of the BL Genre, then I wouldn't be surprised if you could build a fan-base around your story development and world building alone.

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The Black Out

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Froschmo
FroschmoAuthorFroschmo

Thank your for the feedback! I will try harder, especially my grammar lol

Crastinus
CrastinusLv5Crastinus

Thank you for the review. Helped me with my decision if I should pick this up. Though I have no problems with bl (understatement!) I do have some sort of issues with ABO. Due to this review, I decided to put this in my library and wait for more chapters before reading.

prettysexy123
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