Review Detail of AnnoyedReader in Fortune of Lifetimes
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I dunno if it's just because I've read too much stories...bur I found this plot too typical. The characters seems to have no distinction and while the writing itself is not bad and it is stable, there are no particular part that make it different than the other similar stories. The emotional part of characters are simply not there... Like when MC got his past lifes memories, he should have more reaction to it such as fear, shock, confusion, and who am I? Ren? Or am I *blah past lifes names*? And, another thing is even when he accept the past lifes memories, if a child got memories out of nowhere they will be influenced by it. It will create trouble. The personalities of his past lifes will not be easily resolved like you seemingly written.
Fortune of Lifetimes
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I suppose I haven't really expressed how much influence on him the memories have had, or maybe I haven't written it correctly to show that, but I've attempted to make him seem more mature than someone his age would be. Now, I'm not sure if that's come off correctly, but I also have Damon to sort of show the difference between the two people who are basically from the same circumstances to try and make that comparison. Anyway, thanks for the advice and ill try to work on the points you mentioned.