Review Detail of Jaegeral in Limerence

First of all, let me start off by saying that this is my first time reading a novel with a female as a protagonist, so good job on baiting me, fellow author. The story has a solid plot. The characters personalities also touch upon the realm of 3D, a difficult feat to achieve. But the grammar and punctuation would need a bit of work. I hope that you study the correct use of past perfect tense. Some sentences were awkward to read. For example: "All the guests were very satisfied with the party, they all have fun. " (Prologue) You should substitute the 'have' with 'had': "All the guests were very satisfied with the party, they all had fun. " This example above uses the past perfect construction to refer to a past reaction (they had fun) that occurred before another past reaction (they felt satisfied). Anyway, the story was quite enjoyable. Keep up the good work. Cheers!