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It's Good... That's it. Nah, I'm just joking... The world building here is amazing, yup, really! especially when the author adds up engineering on his fantasy world. But I found something that turns me down :< The *** jokes are being abused here too much, and I know the author even said that he wanted this novel to be comedic, but it isn't essentially needed to be *** jokes right? it's okay to touch it on and I gotta admit that at first, It was amusing and hilarious but, as time goes by it became toxic to the story to the point that I skip chapters. (Not only that, I am a bit skeptical of the author. Well, you see, he clearly shows his fetishes on as* l*cking, and those big racks of his characters in the story, some *** jokes is a bit too much. In short, I don't want to offend the author but his writing shows his sexual desires, making me think that the author is a single who has not experienced real relationships... Please, author, don't get offended >.<) And that's not only the reason why I skip chapters. Some chapters are not that necessary to the story honestly, an example of this is the longest school entrance arc that I had ever read, yes the point of this is to add more and expand plot lines but man. Well, the start gets me hyped because of the uniqueness of the story, and I don't want review it fully because the story clearly isn't in the climax yet. But I do hope that the author improves the things that I've pointed out. it'll make the story enjoyable to read. There are many potentials in this story, I'm a writer too not here but on Royal Road... I am the same as the author who wants to improve English (well I want to improve my English grammar) and share our fantasy to inspire others. There are still good and fun or positive things about this novel, and there's a lot! my stars wouldn't be 4 if it isn't that great, right? But, fellow author, keeeeeep up the good work! and continue to inspire others!

The Chronicles of the Immortal God

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lol, are the *** really that much? seems like I have to trim them down

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kcgrabinAuthorkcgrabin

ugh, but my *** are not that many to the point that my novel was saturated with it?