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You have such a good premise to work on. Your idea is brilliant but your story writing lacks alot of things. Also, please dont follow the pattern of chinese authors to stack in more words and make more chapters. A shorter story would be better if it is relevant. Also, the the modern world isn't as savage as the ancient one he came from. That is all well and good if it was in an ancient chinese world, but if you are writing about the modern world, make it so that the people act like modern people do. Now we do have a lot of assholes around but there are good people around too. Killing someone isn't that common and it isn't condoned either. Also, please don't mind my criticism. This is my first time telling an author my point of view and even that is because I am absolutely in love with idea you have put forth and I wish to read something extremely good rather than something mediocre.

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Ancient Cultivator in Modern World

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Hmmm, you're right about the modern world not being as savage as the ancient world, however. As for the reason why they would act like that, Although I want to explain it now, It would count as me spoiling things so I shall refrain, and as for the matter of story writing... Did I really stack more words in my writing? Of course I knew about it at the early stages of my story since several chapters of the story was uploaded about eight months ago and at that time, I didn't really care whether what I was filling things out for word count, but speaking at the latter pages of the current book, in your point of view, did I improve, or I am still bad at writing? Please enlighten me.