The story started out pretty decent for an original. The start was ok but really there is no description of character appearance and almost to none world building (except for some at the beginning). The pace is fast... "way over the top" fast which leads to a plot that feels like you (but in fact it's the author) unintentionally skipped a chapter (or for that matter an entire arc of character development). By chapter 30 I can guarantee you that you will know what I am talking about. For those who read stories with an A.I./Bio-Chip will encounter a "System" which is a fresh take on the monotone notifications, it calls the MC a weakling and stuff, but it is way to OP scanning and hacking almost all peoples magic and artifacts before the MC has justifiable strength. Yes it's a first(?đ¤) for the author but in no way should this be an excuse for this "story" (a story should really be a logical connection of events).
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