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I'll keep this short and give it constructive criticism. I love the Comedy, I love the Shameless MC, I love the Tsundere Dad, I like the World Setting. I also like how the “Harem Heroine” became like the Villain of the story and I like how you wrote the “MC” as a egoistic heroic hypocrite. Reminds me of JP Isekais! But the way the MC handles each scenarios each isn’t very intelligent. You can tell he’s struggling. It'd be more cooler if he actually knew a bit more about the world he wrote lol I don’t like how you made the “Previous Owner” still alive but trying to take back over his body. That’s really stupid ^.^ just a unnecessary obstacle when MC already has a lot on his plate. I also don’t like how you first made it seem like MC and “MC” have strong enmity towards each other, then their argument becomes to like a “Sibling Quarrel” with retorts coming back and forth. I think you need to put a balance between comedy/serious moments. I was in awe on the recent chapter. It reminds me of those Shoujo CNs, where the Male Lead has done a lot of bad things but falls in love with a girl with complete low status. What’s more, the intellectual Kuudere type! Story has a lot of potential.. I also think that you made the MC Character Setting too much of a hateful character. I mean at least in “HSSB” MC kept his reputation but this one was literally a murderer/rapist. You'd think the Sect would try to keep face in their reputation. Anyways, these are just my thoughts and i hope you take them to account. Idk if your serious about this story or not, so it's not my place to say. Maybe your just writing this story for fun. But yeah some parts of the Novel, really need some polishing/rewritten! I'll keep in touch with the story for now
Antagonist Gets A Plot Armor
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Welp, let's take step back and breath seriously. Yeah, I agree some of your criticism. it's constructive. it's insightful. and i'm thankful, fellow daoist. And yeah, it's only been the first day going outside he wrote and a bunch of **** is happening. and yeah, I think the typical MC is too low level to be considered an opposition to his goals. so, i added destiny controlling the plot and people and the original antagonist because pressure is not enough. And another yeah, it reminds you of HSSB. but do take note this is not HSSB and it will never be HSSB or any. i'm trying to be original, but it seems i haven't been trying hard enough. and yeah, since I don't want to brawl with the MC since that's courting death, why not argue with him until he's speechless. but then again, stupid plot-armor saves the day. And yeah, your right. the sect won't allow such a scoundrel to roam around being a sick egoist. but do take note that its a dogs eat dogs world were even a criminal can become king. i'm trying to implicate that idea since there's gonna be alot of blood shed. And also yeah, i need to rewrite it to perfection. i see some flaws when i look back. and i'll try to satisfy your expectations too. just take note, at the end of the day. I'll get this antagonist to get some plot armor for his own.