Review Detail of Primordial_Seven in Transcending Cultivation: Path of Absolute!
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a synopsis is meant to catch readers attention unfortunately yours doesn't and by telling people read it to find out puts off others as well keep it basic, (mcs name here) had tragic life (no details to make them wonder what's tragic) upon reincarnation due to dying due to (reason of death) he/she awakens ... then give list of questions for the potential reader not commands, commands are off putting but questions are like ear worms would get stuck in readers mind and want to read it. a example don't think of black cat, that is a command and I've automatically made you think of one. now you are annoyed that my example has proven correct and you become dismissive. but if I say is their a black cat at your window, you not only thought of a black cat but have now or will look at a window and think, is their a black cat their. and the next time you go past a window and this post crosses your mind you will ask yourself again is their a black cat at the window. this has caused me to become an incessant ear worm in your mind that is impossible to remove due to the phrasing of the question. even years later you would ask that question. now when it comes to writing if asking questions related to the book will he, can he etc etc even if reader already knows without reading they would still want to know if they are correct and by how much and how. examples can catness everdeen survive the hunger games, can harry potter defeat the dark lord, how does a hundred year old man jump out a window and disappear, why and who was someone mudred on the orient express
Thanks for the feedback! I tried to fix it but I'm not very good with synopsis, so can't say if it is good or not.
Brian70707:a synopsis is meant to catch readers attention unfortunately yours doesn't and by telling people read it to find out puts off others as well keep it basic, (mcs name here) had tragic life (no details to make them wonder what's tragic) upon reincarnation due to dying due to (reason of death) he/she awakens ... then give list of questions for the potential reader not commands, commands are off putting but questions are like ear worms would get stuck in readers mind and want to read it. a example don't think of black cat, that is a command and I've automatically made you think of one. now you are annoyed that my example has proven correct and you become dismissive. but if I say is their a black cat at your window, you not only thought of a black cat but have now or will look at a window and think, is their a black cat their. and the next time you go past a window and this post crosses your mind you will ask yourself again is their a black cat at the window. this has caused me to become an incessant ear worm in your mind that is impossible to remove due to the phrasing of the question. even years later you would ask that question. now when it comes to writing if asking questions related to the book will he, can he etc etc even if reader already knows without reading they would still want to know if they are correct and by how much and how. examples can catness everdeen survive the hunger games, can harry potter defeat the dark lord, how does a hundred year old man jump out a window and disappear, why and who was someone mudred on the orient express
