Review Detail of Ilovefics in MHA: One-Hit Hero
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Hello! I'm still new to writing, there are still loopholes in the story. There would be some grammatical errors since English isn't my primary language. The story development needs some refining, I read one of the comments and I completely agree. My fic doesn't have that depth ya know? I'm more focused on the world background rather than the main character and the characters feel off. I'll refine that aspect, as well as the fighting scenes and other essentialities to improve my story. I have a lot of free time since it's summer vacation, that's why I'm updating like crazy. I still have tons to improve, that's why I'm rating myself 4.4 (Come on, even if I'm lacking I wouldn't rate myself a 1, spare me) (The gif is my face when I'm writing new chapters)
MHA: One-Hit Hero
Ilovefics
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Author crush magic is not wind magic, I'm in chapter 6 until now you said that MC uses wind but that's not how crush magic works it's power is to smash everything into tiny pieces like dismantle in jjk. you could change that description by saying it is modified or combined with his mother's power. I'm saying this because this fic has potential, pls consider this suggestion
Kakarot1809:Author crush magic is not wind magic, I'm in chapter 6 until now you said that MC uses wind but that's not how crush magic works it's power is to smash everything into tiny pieces like dismantle in jjk. you could change that description by saying it is modified or combined with his mother's power. I'm saying this because this fic has potential, pls consider this suggestion
Kw0z:Are you dumb? You just said “that’s not how it works” to something the author created. Idiot.
I am gonna be honest, the main thing in an MHA fic is the quirk. You don't even understand the quirk you used for this fic... If you have read the other review and comments then you would know that you just made a knock off One For All. Crush Magic of guildarts does not work that way! Even if the doctor made a mistake because he does not know about Magic of fairytail or specifically crush magic in this case, the mc should have known!