Review Detail of HambinoRanx in Eclipse Arcana

Good overall story however I feel the Snypsis might be confusing readers. It doesn't really give people a good expectation of what is going to happen or what to expect. I suggest looking at writers like Brandon Sanderson, who has written some amazing Snyps. Are good Grammar errors also, but the story is good, the characters are likable, and the world-building has promise. It's a marathon, not a sprint, so keep it up and always be growing.