at first i'm a bit confused when i read the prologue and the early 1st chapter cuz he didn't introduce the mc first and already made action scenes. but you introduced the mc later on, idk if you meant it to suggest the time difference between the first characters you introduced first and i like the power systems and how they work were kinda unique too (in my opinion) your way of writing isn't that as expressive as other authors but i like how i can still understand it and catch the pace of the story.
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LIKEi did introduce the main characters later on the story to give it a time difference between the characters! thanks for catching on the pacing of the story!, i'm not really that confident about how i write and will my readers understand it and catch the pace of the story so i really appreciate your review! -author