Review Detail of Omny1928 in @ unknown

CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM. It needs more: Paragraph spacing ( Image for when to space below) A proofreader or someone to read over your work before uploading. Show don’t tell. Instead of saying something bland like: “I swam over and saved them.” You should explain how. “Fighting against the current, I stretched out my arm grabbing them by the shirt as I guided them to the safe sandy shore.” Make sure to seperate the dialogue from the describtion of the scene. I stole this \/