Review Detail of Pragmatico in Endless Evolution: Last Star

Read to chapter 20 for reference. My main issues and issues he reasons I stopped reading are the gramatical errors as well as the main plot so far. The MC is ok not the smartest but not the dumbest either just really lucky. The plot is he wants revenge for being left to die but his focus is all over the place instead of on getting stronger. Also the world building is lacking severely so far. The weapon of a needle made of silent thread is unique and goes nicely with the lighting aspect of his artifact. Was waiting to see his nexus but he started to get side tracked so I stopped reading. The dialogue also feels forced and doesn’t flow like a real conversation would or should at least wish you luck