Just read the first 2 chapters starting is good and the father turning into a female was unexpected but mehh!Looking for some fun experience with this stotry..🤞❣️
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GOSTARBro if was like they met have a talk and the mc was not able to see if it was a male or female then it will be like "oh that was something unexpected" but when u write the word father we all imagine a old man and u write they spend time talking and watching movie so a mc should be able to easily know that the habits of a male old man and a lady is different ..the main point was the word FATHER ..
But Father was a name and i also give discription about young person, but you are also right it can be written better or I should have used other name,i will continue trying improve my writing.Thank for the feedback man.
J_Dracula:Bro if was like they met have a talk and the mc was not able to see if it was a male or female then it will be like "oh that was something unexpected" but when u write the word father we all imagine a old man and u write they spend time talking and watching movie so a mc should be able to easily know that the habits of a male old man and a lady is different ..the main point was the word FATHER ..
np.but the impression that left after reading the chapter was that father was a old man as the description was not fully stating that father was just a name that his children gave him ..
SlaveofSociety:But Father was a name and i also give discription about young person, but you are also right it can be written better or I should have used other name,i will continue trying improve my writing.Thank for the feedback man.