Review Detail of Ace_of_your_heart in Embracing the shadows

I read the two chapters, let's see, suggestions, hmm, first is the slow pace that you need to worry about since it will either get boring to read or write since some characters are just not fun to write, they suck all the motivation out of you. Second, villainous behavior is alright as long as it's for something even minutely good, i.e. good enough for a reason so that you can use it to connect your mc to other people otherwise it will be just someone doing horrible deeds for no reason other than doing it. Third, world-building is quite relatable for now, I always wanted Beyblades as well, so think more about it since it can be used as a stray thought to distract yourself from a long chapter. Fourth, use commas. It isn't that bad but it could be better. Last but not least, don't go too in-depth while creating a bad scenario it's bad for one's mental health as well as poor publicity.

Thanks and I will try to improve minding your suggestions 🙏🙏