Excellent writing, the flow are smooth and the emotion in it also got me. Great job. The dark opening is just, wow, gripping. update stability, 1 chap/day, nice, target achieved, keep this up. Not much can be concluding from this early chaps, but looking at how the scene and dialogue were fleshed out, it has clear direction ahead. Synopsys, you could improve that, the current one is vague, give nothing about the plot of the story, the background of the mc, etc. It's like telling the reader what will they go through in this story. Overall, awesome, keep updating!
mrdarksoul
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GOSTARHey, That's a detailed review, and to be honest that's what I really need now. Focused criticism. I am glad you like my work and that's only the beginning of my journey in this world of writing. Don't worry, I'll be fixing some mistakes and updating as soon as possible. Since I'm the only one here, Writing, Revising and Editing. Well, I appreciate your review. Thank you [img=recommend]
mrdarksoul:Hey, That's a detailed review, and to be honest that's what I really need now. Focused criticism. I am glad you like my work and that's only the beginning of my journey in this world of writing. Don't worry, I'll be fixing some mistakes and updating as soon as possible. Since I'm the only one here, Writing, Revising and Editing. Well, I appreciate your review. Thank you [img=recommend]