I'll say this first your writing need some impovent,tbh I really like how this story like movie script. the story itself is good I like how mature and mystery that I'm getting from the few five chapters. the world background is kinda nice to know that there small details consider like the character and the world around them. overall my tip is that improve writing and editing cause sometimes dialogues are confusing.
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