Author have pretty good idea for the plot and chracter but he is inexperienced and it shows in the writing. Even with everything done good, this feel very bland, like a highschool textbook. I think author just need more experience . I wish i could be more helpful or tell him how to improve but idk how to improve writing, I can only read and tell you my experience. Anyway goodluck author
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