Review Detail of Sphire1707 in THE DRACONIC PHOENIX(A Bleach fanfic)

Slow and depressing start doesnt have to mean boring. However if it is boring then its a fault of the writing and the Author. Not the fact it was slow.

is it actually boring???

Well i dont know i havent read the story. I was simply making a general statement. At least in my view some stories that start off slow arent a problem so long as they are still entertaining. I have run into stories which are fast and boring and some wish are too slow and eventually become boring. My point was that a slow start can be well done so long as the story is still engaging and entertaining. However if you fail to keep us entertained with the slow progression then the story will falter and eventually become boring and annoying to read. Which is when people will begin to ask for a faster progression. Not sure if i explained that well but i hope my point got across.

got it, but you can read my book first and tell me which category i am in

Well can you give a basic rundown of the story? I was interested a bit when i saw bleach but then i saw a Naruto tag and it seems like the MC is in Naruto which made me lose interest.

It's later going to be set in the bleach world. he's not going to the naruto world. The MC is reincarnated in his world by a ROB with extra perks that he doesn't know about. He also doesn't know that he offended the ROB by refusing to work for him. He grows and then goes to war for his country and there he's found out to be special and so he is kidnapped and dragged into someone's plot to become king. Long story short, he loses everybody that he cares about and get's tortured for a few thousand years, after which he finally escapes and while escaping in his circumstances, he breaks open a void in space unintentionally and ends up in the bleach world about a hundred years to the start of canon. He makes some plans and does somethings, but he is majorly going to begin actions around when canon starts and he will join in some of the fights while trying to strengthen himself enough to fight a celestial level being. There are other elements and twists that i will advise to read to find out. Just to be clear though, this is not wish fulfillment and if there will be any romance it will be later in the story.

So, did you read, or are you going to give it a read.

I dont get why it has a Naruto tag then. Being imprisoned for thousands of years seems too long but you fo as you wish i suppose. I dont mind the MC not being a literal god on earth. However it would be good if he was powerful and could hold his own, it wouldnt be good if he was pushed atound by the powerHouses in the other spiritual races. If you want him to be weak then you have to make him a smart and manipulative MC to survive. Otherwise reading a weak MC thats also stupid would be boring and annoying. Romance is fine depending how you do it. I dont mind harems for stories that dont require much thinking. If the MC Will be a Hollow i guess youre only valid options are Tier or Nel If the MC does become a Hollow i hope he has some sort of interesting power. Honestly power wise Hollows are the most boring. Shinigami are the best with all the Kido and all the possible Zanpakuto.

Sorry i havent read. Well i guess bot that ive asked you so many questions i have to read or ill feel bad.

thanks

don't worry and read, I got you

I havent read it yet. Just added it to my library, read the Auxillary chapter and looked through the chapter list. It takes way too long for the MC to actually get to Bleach. I honestly dont feel like reading your ”prologue” its not what im here for. Im here for Bleach not all this extra filler. Sure you may say its essential and not filler but remember. Many prople hated the Fullbring arc after Aizens arc and that was also technically canon even though to many people it was just Filler. Just getting that rant out of the way. Honestly I’ll read it tomorrow and give some feed back. That chapter list really bottomed out my motivation to read the story.

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Well im late but ive read the prologue. Honestly i hated it, it was boring to read. Just made me dislike the MC, everything was way too forced. Thousands of years of torture and Isolation but the MC had no changes. If it wasnt because I had Promised you i would have just skipped it and went straight to chapter 17 or 18, i dont feel like it would make a difference if i skipped it or not. Im stopping at 17 simply because i have no more motivation to read. I know you were leaving comments about people dropping at chapter 10 and leaving useless review but keep in mind we are here because we read the title and were promised a Dragon/PheoniX MC in Bleach Instead we get whatever this useless piece of trash the MC was and no bleach. Its understandable people would get annoyed. Especially considering how bad the begining chapters all are. They dont grab your attention and make you want to stick around and read. For me at least it did the opposite. Honestly, the bleach part better be Amazing. I need something good after what i just went through.

i feel you pain bro... i work for 13-14 hours, and back home want to read some good and stress relief work, but... what i get is... yeah,.. cant say it. its like, we readers are masochist who like reading mc get tortured and his family being murdered.depressing... and i have hard time to get this out of my mind..

Honestly i skipped most of the drama and torurute all that. I barely skimmed the chapters. Honestly this story has too many cluches that i dont enjoy. The Torture was forced. No reason for an MC with such amazing bloodlines to be sealed and tortured for thousands of years. Also later on the Author splits the MCs soul for weak reasons and forces the MC to stay out of the story so canon isnt changed. Its all too forced.