Review Detail of IINeeRoII in Bleach: Achievement (rewrite)

Item: Bleach: Achievement (rewrite)
Rating: 1.6

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IINeeRoIILv11yrIINeeRoII

This is Harem, for those who expected this comment or clarification hahahah. The story is not bad, but it does not focus on bleach, it seems more like a multiversal journey, personally I think he left his world very quickly, there is no proper transition of the character, relationships do not develop properly until now (family or friends) , even though you have the opportunity. He doesn't care about his world, that shows, he let the canon events happen and he doesn't get involved at all (I don't know what the author thought but I think he doesn't take into account butterfly effects, or anything similar and if so, it doesn't show in the fic). Note: There are quite a few unedited data dumps.

Bleach: Achievement (rewrite)

AllBullshit

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AllBullshitAutorAllBullshit

I did say in a comment section that he won't act till the Arrancar arc

1yr

AllBullshitAutorAllBullshit

So from what I see you are the guy that gives one star to all stories with Harem? I very much want to delete this but since I admit that your comment do have some bits of constructive criticism, I will let it here

1yr

IINeeRoIILv1IINeeRoII

Personally, I have never given 5 stars to any story apart from Lord of mysteries and My house of horror and maybe Trash of count family, and on this site the most I have given is 3 stars. So don't feel so offended. As for your fic, you have to admit that everything happens too fast, there is no character development and what is important, world development or world building. Yes, many powers but that's all? What can we expect as readers if everything moves so fast.

AllBullshit:So from what I see you are the guy that gives one star to all stories with Harem? I very much want to delete this but since I admit that your comment do have some bits of constructive criticism, I will let it here

1yr

InjusticeLv5Injustice

In his defense, have you ever seen a good harem fanfic? The correct answer is no

AllBullshit:So from what I see you are the guy that gives one star to all stories with Harem? I very much want to delete this but since I admit that your comment do have some bits of constructive criticism, I will let it here

1yr

AllBullshitAutorAllBullshit

Yes, I did! Have you seen A Nascent Kaleidoscope? Also, the problem is that usually, the author tries to force love between the two sides, and most of the time it results in a rushed job. What I will try to do is very different.

Injustice:In his defense, have you ever seen a good harem fanfic? The correct answer is no

1yr

LordmoonlightLv5Lordmoonlight

I'm a harem fan n I'll have to say change of wind a dxd fic which is good you good a deal with a devil and many more they are just not on WN

1yr

NandakLv1Nandak

why don't you go and read " infinite mana in the apocalypse" then?

Injustice:In his defense, have you ever seen a good harem fanfic? The correct answer is no

1yr

MukomaTJLv1MukomaTJ

Lol, I thought it was clear when I didn't see the harem tag but by chapter 4, my Spidey sense was tingling 😂 Thanks for the heads up and thoughtful review!

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