Review Detail of JustThatBoredGuy in Strike Force: Legacy

I'm going to say that this book has great potential, but it has shit pacing, abrupt scene changes, and other things that needs to be rectified. The author has written a few books that while appealing to readers who have no taste, the book does poorly to entice veteran readers (like myself( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°))..... I'm not saying that I could or even can rectify these problems, because I'm not an author, and I'm not good at writing etc, bit this book can be a chance for the author to improve his writing skills.. The storyline seems to be coming along decently, the system part was abrupt as well and simply made no sense(from a background pov). I suggest that the author or editors or whatever take their time to edit the book and make sense out of it...with regards-Justhatboredguy~