Review Detail of literl010 in The Walking Dead, John Adler

The mix of present tense, third person, and simplistic prose makes it seem like more of a list of events, rather than an actual story. The cheats/3 wishes granted are totally world breaking and undermine any effort made by the characters. There isn't much character development, and there isn't even much dialogue, and what little there is is false and unnatural. I'm not keen, but good luck with your novel.