It well written, the pacing is relatively consistent. However the plot/storyline is a bit of a mess. It’s almost as if it can’t decide between being a slice of life ‘game dev’ story, an action adventure story, or a romance story. The flow between genres could be polished to allow for a smoother transition between the story’s mood/atmosphere. Still a good story though, lots of nostalgia points and fun moments.
NunuXD
Liked it!
GOSTAR🤷🏻 then idk man lol, it’s a translated work. Translations tend to get all funky especially when it’s just directly translated instead of getting filtered through and edited properly.
CalistormX:The main thing causing the doubt for me is when the author uses 'she' instead of 'he' for one or many paragraphs, if it was just one or two instances, I can see it as a typo
It’s relativly common when you’re rushing through stuff and don’t double check your own work. I’ve noticed that I’ve occasionally missed an ‘s’ here and there so instead of ‘she’ I end up typing ‘he’.
CalistormX:I have seen some mistakes with pronouns which makes me confused whether it is translated fanfic rather than what author claims
The main thing causing the doubt for me is when the author uses 'she' instead of 'he' for one or many paragraphs, if it was just one or two instances, I can see it as a typo
Vargr_the_Skald:It’s relativly common when you’re rushing through stuff and don’t double check your own work. I’ve noticed that I’ve occasionally missed an ‘s’ here and there so instead of ‘she’ I end up typing ‘he’.