Review Detail of davexlee in chapter 1 Ella Riz Rubinson

I'm reviewing after the first update. The earlier chapter is for the character introduction, it's informative and precise. I like to know how the plot going from here. I have a suggestion, maybe the author shouldn't use the punctuation mark as the way to stress a word or sentence. In my personal view, this kind of use a little bit hindering the readers' rhythms of reading. But overall this is a promising start! I'm waiting for more updates, I'm cheering on you author nim.