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The idea is kind of intresting. But the big letdown is writing style, it's like reading a dry diary . With too many explanation and a lot of unnecessary information . Because of that, characters doesn't have any qualities to be described or being relatebale to readers. Still ,I'm writing it on a 8 chapter, so maybe it's become better. But even now it's hard to continue .
The Multiversal Empire
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Nope. Nothing. It's still feels like reading daily chores with some absolutely weird stuff. (like "the man" crying out for his new / old friends in a trial world - like yeah, definitely not out of character and definitely very smart). BTW, 5 chapters first prologue. Trial world feels like another prologue. And story very fast paced and lacked any details.
Thanks for the feedback. I'm working on making it less dry, I will be getting into the main story in the next couple of chapters and I hope to improve my writing before that.
Yuri_is_Ntr:Nope. Nothing. It's still feels like reading daily chores with some absolutely weird stuff. (like "the man" crying out for his new / old friends in a trial world - like yeah, definitely not out of character and definitely very smart). BTW, 5 chapters first prologue. Trial world feels like another prologue. And story very fast paced and lacked any details.