Review Detail of SolAce in An illusion

The story started off well, with the protagonist ‘explaining’ what forced her to become that way. Definitely it has potential ! But here are some of my issues: 1. Grammar— I found several grammatical errors like run-on sentences, missing commas, and an occasional incorrect capitalization. My overall advice is to capitalize all first words in a dialogue, be aware to place comma after phrases in the beginning, and don’t always use commas— instead, periods or semicolons 2. Characters— Now I do like the FL to a certain degree; she seems to be a character worth sympathizing with. However, I found the other side characters, and especially the husband in the later chapters, to be rushed and not fit the story as I expected. I guess a way to make them more memorable is to post chapters entailing their interactions with the FL, making an impact on her or whatnot. 3. Repetition— I found a lot of ‘something’ in the passage overall, which, in all honesty, is correct grammatically. But I would enjoy it more if you could describe it differently. I know this is a bit into the specifics, but I really hope you get the picture. 4. Story development— As I mentioned earlier, with the characters not being fleshed out, I found the later chapters a bit rushed while the beginning was decently paced. And I began to confuse myself what was truly happening; it was like one surprising thing after another: sadness, suspicion, murder, and a quick save by the pastor. Altogether, I believe this could use some more work. Despite all this, I can tell you are trying your best to convey the story, and I hope my review could assist you in your journey. After all, we all start from somewhere ! Keep it up, Author !