Review Detail of Jo_J in Outside Paradise

I don't understand what all these prologues are about. It's really messy. Prolougue supossed to be an opening to a story that establishes the context and gives background details, often some earlier story that ties into the main one, and other miscellaneous information. Maybe it's better to sort everything out, make a plan and start all over again? Just to save the content which is interesting, the beginning is addictive. I don't see any language mistakes, which is an advantage.