Review Detail of Panqiuyan in DO YOU TRUST ME?

You have a potentially good story. I would suggest you write a bit of world-building because I am confused about the setting of the story. is it in China or somewhere else? I would like to see descriptions of places and characters. I also would advise you to look up how to write in the active tone of voice instead of passive. this story has some grammar issues. other than that keep up the good work.