Review Detail of Brian70707 in STAR WARS: The Jaeger Saga

Needs editor to many Times you say he is doing something then next sentence say same thing To descriptive in his actions when it's something simple Mcs reaction isn't realistic when talking to that rebel guy The females reaction of laughing on the floor isn't realistic You havnt stated at which period mc is during the empire Pretty much 0 information on the mc this decreases readers ability to connect with your novel