Hi, this story contains a lot of good elements. However, there are numerous errors and flow problems that makes the story very confusing. I will not go into detail here. I will only point out that the characters, plot, development, grammar, and spelling need serious attention before moving forward with any more chapters. A good proofread and edit would serve this story well.
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GOSTARYes, an edit will serve the story well. Once you have proofread and edited all the misspellings and grammatical errors out of the story, more readers can understand and enjoy what you have written.
Anwesha_:Edit will serve it but how?