Review Detail of Idle_Daoist_ in Universe: Kai

Item: Universe: Kai
Rating: 4

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Idle_Daoist_Lv44yrIdle_Daoist_

This is a new story with great potential- and reviewing the first few chapters, the grammar is good, the character seems okay for the most part and the story or rather plot is promising. A great story- and I would hope it is not turned into something like a harem- Ciao

Universe: Kai

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Any tips on improving my character? Ty for the review!

4yr

Idle_Daoist_Lv4Idle_Daoist_

Not much - other than the story going too fast- it would be great if you could fluff it out, some humour and comic relief in between chapters

Re_start:Any tips on improving my character? Ty for the review!

4yr

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It's going fast rn so I can hop into the actual U13 stuff, it'll be slowing down a bit soon :)

Idle_Daoist_:Not much - other than the story going too fast- it would be great if you could fluff it out, some humour and comic relief in between chapters

4yr

Idle_Daoist_Lv4Idle_Daoist_

That's fine- I'm waiting to see the changes and originality within U13

Re_start:It's going fast rn so I can hop into the actual U13 stuff, it'll be slowing down a bit soon :)

4yr