Review Detail of dorkw2010 in Celestials journey

I like the character design but the storyline if there is and it mostly with bell which dude I get this is fan fiction but come on most people care for our mc and how he does and for original connection with bell not same as the manga and show like dude it like you don't care and I got to force myself to read through it because I know there potential here and I know you could make a good story out of this if not than ask for help with other writer to proof read your story and draw a plot please