Uhmm! the dialogues are kinda off or some of the sentences are lacking with words. So focus on the dialogue that you have to make it less as possible, and docus on the environment of the story. And check this website out https://virtualwritingtutor.com/ It will help you with your grammar as well learn from it. We should learn more as it will be better and accept criticism haha we also learn from it. That’s all and thank you for reading mine. 😊😊😊
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