Review Detail of alesjandritos in Demon Guardian in the Multiverse

can you give me a real review to improve. With just smiles, I don't know what I should improve?

I feel like this novel needs an urgent rewrite Author seems to skip cause and go straight to effect In his writing style, completely ignoring the glaring plot holes and lacking character motivations in the process. This is not to say the character concepts are terrible, just their execution. You cannot claim a character acts a certain way, ignoring all common sense due to a deeply ingrained trait, and then frivolously deny it the very next chapter