Review Detail of de_writer in Phoenix's flame

Quite an interesting story. I feel there's a lot of potential in the plot however grammar made it a little hard to read. Dialogue was also a bit of a mess and it was difficult to know who was talking and what they were saying. Descriptions were mostly okay as were the characters. The only thing was when one of the mc's classmates were describing her, she sounded a little like a Mary Sue. Not sure if this is the authors intentions but if it is hopefully the story will be done nicely. Otherwise great job author. You have a great story here that with a little work could be a masterpiece.