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i like potatoes and writing i guess

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  • potatomashed
    potatomashed3 months ago
    Respondeu a Jaxon235

    Yes, yes, I've read a lot with similar writing styles. They remind me of webtoons. At least, how they're written. There is a fine line between quality and just imitation. Just because something has similar writing style doesn't account it being good, because execution sets everything apart. This novel, for example, feels wasted on that style, even if the overall story might be good. Extra's Death - I don't really like the story or progression, so I dropped it. In such cases, writing style would be my least of worries.

  • potatomashed
    potatomashed3 months ago
    Respondeu a Entrail_JI

    Yes, I've tried those. Regressor's Tale of Cultivation isn't good writing to me, if I had to be honest. Maybe the overall story has it's plus points but the author makes a lot of beginner mistakes 1) Info dump 2) Disregards show not tell rule. When these two are together in the same place, the writing style usually sticks out badly since author is just explaining and anyone can do that. It's mostly the same throughout. I'd say your novel reads much better narratively than that one since it dispels those 2. The rest - it's not that I don't see the similarity but it still feels lacking. So far, from what I've read, the novel reminds me of these: Narrow-Eyed Villain of Demon Academy, A Depressed Kendo Player Possesses a [...], Academy's Second Seat, Academy's Weapon Replicator etc. I dropped all these because of the writing style. The TL'ed versions of Zenith, Kidnapped Dragons and Novel's Extra are really good, and flows very well. I think this is my main issue aside from the single words taking up lines. The flow is disruptive. And the lack of better descriptions, or how interactions take place keeps breaking too. Especially since MCs main deal is about emotions, and to convey that, it should take much more to express it than the SFX or those little panics, pants etc. There is also redundancy in lines when MC experiences them first hand, how the surroundings react to it etc. up to where I've read (I've read further past the ch I've reviewed since making this comment). But, as I've said before, this might just be a me thing. Seeing how well received the work is, I might be the problem. When I feel like I can get used to this style, I might pick this up again someday. I wish you luck.

  • potatomashed
    potatomashed3 months ago
    Respondeu a Entrail_JI

    I've read plenty of Korean novels. The good ones don't write like this. You might be imitating the style, but it's very disruptive, the way you do it. It's so hard to explain. I'm pretty sure there's also a distinction based on how well this works in Korean, but not in other languages. There are a lot of really basic KR novels that write similarly from what I've read here, but those don't account for good writing either. I'm just being honest. I don't hate you, and I'm sure you can write.

  • potatomashed
    potatomashed3 months ago
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    I'll be real honest. The writing feels so amateur-ish in the sense that the author knows how to write but for the life of me, I cannot understand why he chose to write THIS particular way. It feels like I'm reading a fantasy book for kids. The writing is off-putting. All the unnecessary SFX instead of describing properly. All the weird sentence structures. Sometimes, there is not even a sentence. It's just small words. Single words would constantly take up lines, endlessly. Idk what exactly the author is thinking writing like this. Because of this very reason, I cannot focus. It's very disruptive. The narration is so unreliable. Sometimes, the surrounding descriptions don't feel enough either. It's very small sentences or lines. I tried hard to like this but I cannot. All the good reviews seem to be okay with this so maybe I'm the bad guy? I don't know.