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People can't watch someone behind closed eyes. People can listen to people moving around or, people can open their eyes a partial amount (eithe half-way/half-mast; or peeking through partially closed eyes). Fully closed eyes cannot see anything except darkness.

The opening sentence of this chapter was attention grabbing. This chapter feels less disjointed & more like a starting point than the first 2 chapters did.

Again, why isn't she the one who is telling him she is done with him? She caught him cheating. She should *not* be begging him to take her back. She should be storming out; or at the very least, packing any of her belongings (she has a key, that suggests she has things there). Even if in shock, she should be completely silent & still; or silent & packing. Certain scenes, thoughts, words, and actions are not lining up in these first 2 chapters already. Making things feel disjointed. Hopefully, this was intentional on the author's behalf, & not any other reason.

Why didn't she drop the key here & walk out? It would have made more sense for her to break up with him than the other way around.

I love this author's works. The author never dissapoints when it comes to making a story interesting, making the worlds built in these stories realistic, & bringing the characters to life. The emotions of the characters can easily be felt by the reader. There are few infrequent errors in grammar/spelling/typos. When they do appear, they are easy mistakes to make. The author takes time to make the works polished, shiny, & stand out among many works in the same genres/formulas.

"You possession..." should be "Your possession..." here to be grammatically accurate. "You" is used to address someone; while "your" is giving possession to the you , & "you're" is a contraction of "you are". I love your stories by the way.

As usual this author did an amazing job at grabbing attention & keeping it. Well done author, keep it up. 😁

Grammatically this should read, "...cheated on me with my cousin..." ...cheated on my cousin, implies he was with/married to Sophia & not Emily.

I think you meant "Olivia" instead of Sophia. Sophia is with/in the presence oc the cheating ex of Emily according to the very next line.

Me ranting at Derek: Stop lying, Derek. It's clear you *are* running 🏃 &/ or hiding from Melissa. I hope Tara *never* takes you back. You are *scum*, far lower than a worm 🪱, & not even fit for a trash can/rubbish bin 🗑. Derek in this chapter: