KingHand

Fleur Delacour would be my preferred love interest for the MC

Ok, so you can write and the premise is fine. but I will not be dropping stones yet, because I hate sob story intros, you've read one, you’ve read them all, I would have much preferred a step into this moment with Charlie with a 1 paragraph summary of the system/how they got there after the door closes... that would have been enough and the set up far more enjoyable.

gGetting seriously repetitive with the whole bringing random ass people along, explaining everything again, saving them, talking alot. and oh? another surprise and/or God/Beast/demon

I mean, when money isnt an issue, he could always buy second home and a second lab back in Texas so In the future he could surprise her with it all/ have a another place to retreat too.

an enjoyable chapter. looking forward to more

enjoyable so far