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Author clearly has a lot of passion. You can really feel the love in each skilfully-chosen word. His tasteful descriptions almost make me feel like I'm physically in the scene, physically interacting with the characters. Note: the story is a bit long so don't start until you have some free time. Overall, it's a very good story. I loved every second of it, and I hope you do too.

Story is interesting. You describe way too much. I know you're supposed to show not tell, but try to tone it down a bit.