Now that’a a villain

Here’s a few ideas for you: 1. Give the MC an “Anomaly system,” where he gets points every time he does something that didn’t happen in the previous timeline. Even breathing in a different area than before would give 0.00001 points and so on. This would be great to add to this story since it gives the MC more motivation to change the world he once lived in, rather than simply have a naive goal of getting rich. The MC getting money is great, but all you would need to do is put 5k on a ridiculously high odds sports game he recalls from the past and make like 1M off of a single bet because he knows the score, events, etc. Then if he does this twice, he gets 50m, and so on. It’s a bit easy to make money in his current predicament so it would be best if you added something like a system. Just a suggestion though :) 2. Instead of Sydney dying, the worlds will needs to take another life in place of Sydney’s to compensate. One of jacks close friends or family members dies instead. Likewise, for future events, if he makes money off of a bet, someone else would lose out on a large amount of money. Causality, in other words.

How does this add anything to the story lol

I’ll gift you a magic castle again if you make the mc do something sadistic that’s absolutely outrageous. Maybe killing a few thousand people or going after innocents, do something interesting to make the mcs lore better.

If our mc truly is a terrorist that’s what he would do.

Criminal behavior. Killing their son, stealing his body, then mocking the parents who are desperate to find their missing son. It would be icing on the cake if he killed both of them in front of a sibling of Kaelith.

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Ability idea: Puppeteer: Any words you think of, your target will say aloud. Good for deception/manipulation. Item idea: Food Enhancer: A single drop of this added to a food item will make that item taste like the worst thing the person eating the item has ever tasted, ten times worse. Good for committing acts of terrorism. Weapon idea: Balls Be Gone: Need you say more?

A novel with promising aspects. This is well refined and the writing keeps you engaged in the story. I recommend it.

Got another idea for you. Have the mc switch to Erebus and head to his family home to reunite with his original family, but then go missing again the next day after stealing from their treasury.

Cedric Lamphart: An ingenious calculator that serves as a neutral entity. His exclusive power is Dodge, where he can always dodge the first attack without exception no matter how powerful it is. No one knows this though, and everyone thinks his power is damage amplification instead. His family, one with great power responsible for keeping noble factions in check while ensuring commoners with promising talents don’t rise to one day overtake nobility, recently called him after the tournament. They asked him how it went and if any families were showing signs of promising talents that they needed to weed out or cripple for the time being. They also asked whether any commoners had promising talents and ambitions to match those talents. Cedric responded that the nobles had average talents but there was a commoner named Kaelith who showed up out of the blue and made a splash in the tournament, now everyone knows his name. He asks for permission to initiate a friendly battle with him and cripple him in the process. What he plans to do is let the MC have the first attack on him in the duel, but use an artifact subsequently after to chain the MC. The artifacts only condition is the first attack from the person being chained must be dodged with complete accuracy before it can be used. This is to prevent people with lower talents from imprisoning higher talents using the artifact. Unknowingly, Cedric has a loophole for this with his dodge talent. When Cedric chains up the mc, the mc reveals his system momentarily to get out of the situation by morphing into Erebus since he has no magical power and the chains only work on those with magical talent. Once unchained, he switches back to kaelith and burns him to a crisp. Author I will give you another character next chapter.

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Author if I gift you a magic castle will you mass release on Wednesday? If you do I’ll give it respond to confirm

Hey Peter, gonna be catching up on the chapters I missed. Havent read your content in a week or so[img=like]

Author has a bad habit of starting great series and proceeds to ruin them, then doesn’t know how to fix the problem, so he just starts a new novel instead. I wouldn’t recommend reading this knowing the author.

Can’t access the next 5 chapters, fix it thanks

They yearn for the mines

What’s up with you wanting these store workers to assault a kid for extra revenue? Kinda perverted author tbh

I would, but I own my own business and manage dozens of people. It doesn’t make sense for me to spend time writing novels when I wouldn’t be able to keep up with the demand of readers.

Of course. I have a quest for you now, if you want to receive another magic castle. Task: At some point in the story, it doesn’t matter when, have the MC lure a high noble who disrespected MC for being a commoner to a dark and secluded area to terrorize him and eventually put him under a sleeping spell, taking his body as a model, but not killing him. Then, as the MC uses the nobleman’s body, have him commit obscene acts of terror as the nobleman like blowing up the academy, kidnapping women, running around the academy naked, and when academy professors come to approach him to arrest him and arraign him for his crimes, have the mc switch to his regular school body then when the professors show up, have mc say he saw “high noble person” commit all of these crimes, corroborated by other student testimonies, essentially framing him for committing all of this terror in the academy. When the noble comes-to after being asleep, the professors find him, arrest him, and then expel and send him back to his household, where his parents disown him. There should be a few chapters of the noblemans POV of him getting disowned, just for the laughs, and a chapter or two of him eventually getting killed by something inconsequential like a rock thrown by a kid in the street. Overall, using this idea in your story will make the MC seem very sadistical. There is no reason you shouldn’t add this into the plot.