B6_12nn3
de leitura
516
Ler livros
Honestly everything except the mc is decent. This mf doesnt want to mingle with the storyline yet he keeps living in kuho. For some reason he likes to keep arrogant/cringe font, its a wonder how he even survived in real life with this kind of attitude. He helps out asia and then wonders if it will change canon , like cmon if isse doesnt meet asia it ofc will divurge from canon. And finally in ch 5 why tf he needs touch me's weapon and armour to stop freed why is he so defensive against rias peerage like bro they are barely any threat.
The story is decent with good writing and grammar ,mc is also normal unlike most of the mc in dxd fic who act like a bunch of horn dogs.while the stuff with oc's is getting a but boring its not too bad The only problem i found is how you dealt with mc's first encounter with rias it felt like it was done just for plot convenienvce with no thoughts given into it whatsoever, she is supposed to be the sole heir of gremory family and is only 14 or so during this timeline yet she was roaming alone with akeno in human realm( specifically in mc's town)looking for manga with no bodyguard ?she can just order them in her home why bother getting attacked and risking lives of civilians alongside and also she or akeno had no remorse for causing so many deaths due to their negleigence this was very much out of character.
I was very invested in the story up until he went to visit his team mates. I like the mc but damn why tf is he so chill with his ex teammates i appreciate that he is not going all out edgelord mode on them but why is he so overfriendly and buddy buddy with them why is he so bashfull around his ex like dude why do you want used stuff just keep your distance it us undestandable why she cheated but no reason to take her back either
dunno about the commenters but the author sure likes to complain a lot about the commenter do you want the comment section to be filled with npc comments like " thanks for the chapter" or "more"? ofc real people are gonna give their own thoughts own thoughts on the story whether be negative or positive that's what the comment section is for.
Yup that's what I am talking about having sukuna power doesn't make you sukuna his powers are pretty simple it is he who makes them this good meanwhile gojo has the most broken power in his verse having it will make you invincible regardless of how good you are at using it.
Honestly this fic is very underwhelming. While the grammar is decent the quality of writing itself is pretty mediocre. The interactions between people and the dialogues are very bland and uninteresting, the man hating goddess having a crush on him after a short interaction its just a classic case of making other characters dumb to make the mc look good. His training arc is the most disappointing thing ever i feel like you gave absolutely no thoughts into it" he was fighting a tiger and their fists collided" really? Then few months later he was training against tiger,bear and an eagle AN EAGLE seriously?He is influenced by sukuna and has violent nature yet he feels attraction towards women? This is literally just an edgy mc. The whole fic altogether is extremely fast paced.
You know I always prefer if authors remove the bs about someone dying by a mistake of some higher entity and then the entity in question going to a great length to even compensate the mc who is like an ant to them.it would be better if first chapter starts with mc already being in other world
It is looking pretty good at least the first 7 ch that have been uploaded dunno about the future. I like that the mc is not some edgy kid like in most of the fics on this site ,grammar is also pretty decent the only problem I found was that his only motivation to do anything is through his system.
Since when did liking your own comment equaled fragile ego? So you got so butthurt from a negative review that you tried to search up dirt on me lmao this is what is called a fragile ego. Honestly I am unable to see which of my comments have been deleted so I don't know what you are talking about since this is the only web novel account i have you can make any assumption you want to not like my words will change your mind. And about the "R",you didn't mention it in words sure but your mc is tecnically a grown ass man and he mentioned how he "tore through her hymen" when she tried to seduce/tease him when they were in middle school he is not just a "R" pist but also a "pdf file".