Nitchiren

I make a bet here, this story will be good and people will think about it like a great story. Yeah I don't know how to compliment stories correctly but hey, this novel for the moment is good, the characters are good, what do you wait? No seriously I don't know what do you wait, go read this, good experience here guaranteed.

If this quality remains the same for all the chapters, I have no worries for the future.

Bro deserve the belt

Do like me, write in your laptop and cut your paragraphs with your phone account. Like this you avoid any bad surprises.

I notice that you have some paragraph who are pretty long in your text for no reason. Sometimes when you have a point, it's better to jump the line if you want to fluidify your dialogues or descriptions. It's something I can't imagine not doing it when I post my chapters, I hope my advices are helpful.

Don't worry, I will come. It's difficult for me to say you no when you make a proposal like this. You can't imagine how much this proposal makes me happy, sincerely thank you.

Okay, keep up, champion.

Good introduction chapter, I just find the words he pronounce before he die a little bit strange. He didn't think about his family at all, he just don't care anymore about his Dad or I misunderstood something?

Thank you for the review, this kind of review motivates me even more to continue the writing aeventure. Back-stories, mysteries and fights, that's the dishes I love the most, and also the dishes that this novel offer you from the beginning until the end. I hope everyone will love my cooking skills.