Ifunnyok

Its less about your grammar and more about your wording I really like your story so far though

I've read about 15 chapters and thee story would've been a lot better if the author had a editor or someone they know read over their work, since they make a lot of mistakes and structure sentences strangely. If you can look past the poor English its a cool story and a cool concept in general it 100% has potential

Get a friend or someone to reread and edit what you've written just so you can avoid silly mistakes or poor sentence structuring

Please double check everything makes sense and you use the right tense since i keep seeing you say things in future or past tense when its in the present

Reminds me of a phoenix

Genuinely amazing concept, I'm excited to see where the story goes