LanumKing

It's a good example of how to develop a system novel. The writer did a good job with opening and throughing the mc right into the action but also adding meaning to it. The way the world was explained was logical and made sense, and it wasn't overwhelming it was simple and to the point. Great story overall and ill be adding it to my library's

Good story so far. I feel like the free readers deserved to see zombie apocalypse earlier or something. As thats mabye main reason people read the book but its still good anyway

can we get mc that actually uses his brain isnt he like 16???? just make mc play smart or something. Or um tell him fake name and class why do all mcs have to be like this

shes 18 dam

So here again instead of this say, "As they got closer the woman made a disgusted expression and covered her nose with her remaining hand." but again, I aint no writer either so you can maybe ask a better writer for there opinion on this, but I do this this is a show and not tell situation.

Yō so correct me if I'm wrong but i think this is one of those show and not tell situations like. I think the reader got idea that one of the monsters stayed behind so i don't think this line needs to remain.

excellent start. I see promise in this story. its unique the start is unique. I'm getting waste land alien appocalpse vibes and its well written.

Great story development is nice pacing. Everything is great. it's not my type of story, but i would advise anyone to give it a try.

another excellent chapter i have high hopes for this book

i liked the story good start and its original it properly introduces the read to the world without being generic or copy pasting by making mc die or suddenly end up in dark void etc