I messed up. It should be fourth stage on the system panel, but I forgot to change it… thanks for pointing it out. FYI, every time Qi increase by 10 it’ll increase the realm by on stage during the Qi Refinement period.

They will get upgrades.

No, only special characters. The only characters I have with a special like slang is so far is, Lu Feng, Lin Siyu, Lin Xinyu (Child-like + hot tempered), and Lin Chenyu. I have plans for three others, but they won’t be introduced for another 50ish chapters. Also the slang will be toned down in the future. I’m mainly doing this so it sets the persons personality.

I also want to note, she’s only at the third stage of Qi refinement, and it’ll only take longer in the future. I don’t want to build an OP MC right at the beginning as I find it hard to build the mc character and the others around her.

I did think about this when I made the chapter, but I felt like this would be better for various reasons. 1. She’ll have multiple different skills in the future, therefore she can’t solely rely on just cultivating. 2. She 15 and hasn’t cultivate at all, so doing this kinda helps for future development. 3. I did some math. She was at 3. Something before this (can’t remember off the top of my head) therefore she’d only need to cultivate 12 cycles to get where she’s at, which is possible. So it isn’t unreasonable for her to have such a high level.

Yes, I do understand what you mean. This my first actual book so I for some reason thoight people would get bored too quickly thus rushing everything. I have started to tone down everthing as I start to get a hang of writing, but the mistakes are already made so it might take a while for you really see a change. Thanks for the honest review though!

Thank you very much. I’ll do couple of extra chapters tomorrow

Yea, that will happen in the next chapter

I’m aware of this. The next few chapters will mainly follow Raven now and the romance will be lowered. I just been busy with exam so I just wrote what was easy at the time (which was 11 chapters) so I wouldn’t miss out on updates.

Thank you! I do understand I need to work on something and hope to improve on them.

Trying out a different writing style. How do people feel about the paste of the dialogue? It’s a lot faster then before but I also added more then normal.

Thank you

Sorry! Had 6 products due this week (not even finished them) and two exams coming up so I got a tight schedule. I have writen 6 chapters today so you don’t have to worry about the updates anymore.

No, busy with exams, will continue it on Wednesday with daily updates

Yes, he just started high school…

Hinting at the relationship between them seems more than normal.

Omg! I messed up so bad 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭 why didn’t I see this during the editing?!?! I meant to say the kids where six at the time before his rebirth!

I find it is out of respect not to ask why you’re adopted, and to be glad that they did. They’ll tell once they feel comfortable.

I mean for class was Vanessa just making Ravens past memories come back. As YouTube and twitch, it doesn’t take that much to understand it. I guess you can say when he was study the extra information when he was reborn. And still, he had breaks to do such thing like the whole summer holiday when he was reborn. But now, he’s been going at a project that needs multiple different fields to even get it to work, with little to no breaks. So much information without even taking a break will cause a toll on his brain. That’s how I perceive it though.

Thank you