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honestly this has a cool concept especially since it’ll get to devils and demon slaying breath techniques could or should work on them. however the MC is the most unlikable person i’ve seen, he will just do stuff that has no reason other than being an autist who doesn’t understand basic human emotions. it’s legit the hardest thing i’ve had to read because this dude is an ass from start to where i’m at(he’s fighting litch in the caves) and he legit hasn’t changed personalities wise at all. that would be fine if he was a normal dude but he has the worst personality i’ve seen, and anyone saying “but it’s cool” are either people who have no friends or they don’t understand anything about emotions not even surface level of human emotions. it’s honestly such a POS story and is so annoying because there’s so few good black clover stories and this one isn’t one them.

great another “join hestia fic” just what i needed when you had such a cool concept set up just to ruin it with that. honestly this whole just join hestia is so overdone and tired now especially when someone starts off with such a cool concept and character idea they just all go down the drain when they join hestia. maybe i’m wrong and this will be the one in a million where it doesn’t devolve into trash, but i’m not taking those odds.

man did you skip over the whole argument between kiri and artoria after lancer’s death? because that’s legit my favorite scene in fate/zero and adds a lot of context to what kiri does and his thinking

this is such god awful writing this makes less than zero sense. in canon the reason vis didn’t listen to his brother was because he thought his brother was celebrating his son’s death and wife’s death but this is legit just him instantly believing otto over his brother without listening to him. man this story went to shit fast af in two chapters

why is miyu-verse shirou acting like a child he legit isn’t like this at all even as a kid he was trained by kiri to be basically a second magus killer. so why is he saying “i never want to feel like that and protect what i hold dear”. like my brother in christ this shirou is technically the strongest(at the age we see him) he can use tracing easily, he was able to use his reality marble on his own with no help for more mana. this is the one shirou that could protect whatever he wanted with his own power basically already.

man these chapters are so short i could forgive it if this was an everyday story but it’s not so why such short chapters

good not hood

honestly both are pretty bad choices but also there’s no hood choice at this point in time. also you have to remember he’s only lord or moat callin which while on the rise isn’t yet proven to be worth it. also definitely not asha it makes 0 sense

i actually really like his not caring attitude but i do hope if you keep going with this story(please do it’s pretty fun and good) i hope he does grow into caring about somethings where it conflicts with his not caring attitude. it would at least make for some good character development

favorite RPG has always been new vegas i feel like i regularly replay it every year