Jhaydun

All in all, this novel is a nice read. You can tell that the author is just getting his bearings in the professional writing world, as there are some grammar and spelling issues. But mostly, it's just forgetting to pluralise words and sometimes a word will be missing the last letter, but you can still make sense of what they're trying to say. It's a typical reincarnation story featuring Arthur Grimwood, a boy of humble origins who got a second chance at life after leading a pretty miserable existence before his death. I've read several system novels and written one myself, so I understand them quite well, and Su5h1 has made a system that holds both more and less information than the usual one, including things that are possible to achieve, yet not attained. There are just a couple of gaps in realism which cause you to make a double-take. There were only eight chapters when writing this review, but I think you should give it a chance and keep an eye on the author and their future works as well, because they may achieve great things!

Where on earth did a 3-year-old find a sword he could use? Maybe mention him using sticks around the same length of a sword for his size to practice with?

As someone who worked in childcare for four years, I'll just say that if only a year had passed, he would have been two years old before this chapter, and he could have been walking around and speaking, so you might want to change something.

Shameless Review from the author themselves. I know, I know. Cliche. Fractured Horizon (FH) is my second serialised novel after My Undeath. I'm extremely proud of this novel and where it's leading to, so I hope you'll give it a chance. Feel free to ask me any questions you have here, or in the chapters themselves, and I'll answer all of them. FH is set in a futuristic world, but does not contain HARD sci-fi. It's more of a fantasy story in a futuristic setting. The first twenty-six chapters are a slow burn to the really good stuff. You'll meet, Ryne, the main character, see a lot of what the setting has to offer, the characters surrounding the MC, and get a feeling for what he has to fight for, and more importantly, what he has to lose. Be prepared for an epic story about adventure, love, loss, friendship, survival, and growth.

Sugar, spice, and everything nice. Spice and Wolf? How about Wolf and Spice? 🤭

See this! I just gifted the story: Pizza

See this! I just gifted the story: Massage chair

In the beginning, it truly wasn't the plan. When I started writing here, I did so while on holiday for fun and planned out 50 chapters. When the platform offered me a contract, though, I had to change my idea to suit a longer work, and I, like you, lost my love for this novel. This novel was never supposed to be this long.Sorry you didn't enjoy it, but I'm working on my next novel, so please keep an eye out for my other works ✨

Harmony? No. But the elves and dwarves know that the humans are protected by the gods and don't want to incur their wrath, so they're pacified.There are two more continents, and a world of beastmen, but many of the threats to humans haven't revealed themselves at this point in the story.