Ashane_Radcliffe_8812

author i want you to understand that I have absolutely no hate for your book but there are things in there that could have been better planned though I'm sorry if i offended you because it wasn't my intention

this is called a review for a reason and all I'm doing is stating my opinion the story no hate for anyone because if you had actually read it properly then you would've seen that i previously stated that is book had potential to become something that would read later and i have never wrote an review for any book before because i think this book can be way better than it is but your acting like I'm trying to hate on you when I'm only stating my opinion on your book

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this is pretty much bland and repetitive talking about bonds but doesn't progress in the story much other than mentioning the fights with the avengers which the character is barely paying attention to what's happening in the outside world and it's development and the character and his friends reaction towards it or going against evil mutant organizations the character just feels rushed because you didn't mention where he came from or maybe he lost his parents he didn't mean to mention any of that also didn't mention how he got bullies or if he had any friends before but just went straight onto him accepting the trousers invitation at the school because he was desperate when you should have actually for about what he was getting into accepting the invitation and if Charles could actually be trusted because to him he just a voice that appeared in his head and he's he's not even cautious to Charles or even questioning him in his slightest and was as quick to accept his invitation straight away and then the rest of the chapters are basically repeats of the other chapter but with differences in them like how I mentioned avengers previously but there isn't any difference with the other chapters and the cartoon rethinking much like a teenager and more as an adult because at first I'm pretty sure a teenager would be ecstatic about powers the movie that he be haunted down but that's even happened in the first chapteroverall the book so far need that change the repetitiveness and the author needs to decide whether he or she is going to follow the plot which would be most likely and hopefully they do because the story is not really going anywhere at the moment and is currently deviating from avengers to random mutant organisations and they are not really choosing what they would go for for the entire story other than that this has potential and I really would like to see some change if the author ever decides to read this because I can see this book becoming something that people go back to and reread in the future

is it Zoro or zori author??

well the character is not even born yet so the minimum that he should get is either a 0 or a 1 in str, vit, and dex

naruto???

Zoro who????

Hinata: 'gets knocked out Naruto: HINATA ARE YOU OK!!???