Zbara_1577

no at this point he rally was still a worm no two ways about it.

addendum A He shouldn't be wary of such tales validity. he's got meta knowledge.

No, what i mean is that the mcs thoughts don't reflect the fact that he has meta knowledge. The way you write his thoughts reads as if he doesn't know why. The creepy stuff and things seeming wrong is because of either Chaos or tyranids silence, yet the mcs thoughts seem as if he doesn't know that. He's checking past records, and he's like "hmm somethings not right here" when it's obvious what the answers are. I understand it's your story, and you got your own narrative, but be aware aware of how a reincarnator would think. I've read thousands of such stories, and as many where mc is not a reincarnator, so the writing differences stick out to me.

hmm, given how the Internet operates, there will 100% be people who don't believe dikuna is all evil.

one thing I noticed, It seemed you stopped writing the mc as a reincarnator, and instead, just a regular main character.

bastard dares to cliffhanger me!!?!

also good chapters, I prefer this pace.

I liek this chapter more than all the previous ones, Simply because the plot is moving. you've got a great idea, but the beginning felt a tad too slow, given everything and anything that could take place in W40k. I dont necessarily mean power gain, just that plot must move in a story like this

10% will always love, 10% will always hate. 80% matters on what you do