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DaoistNotAvilable

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2022-05-20 UnidoIndia
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  • DaoistNotAvilable
    DaoistNotAvilable1yr
    Respondeu a Moonwriting

    Thank you for the great review. :)

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    THE RISE OF THE FORGOTTEN GODS
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    DaoistNotAvilable1yr
    Respondeu a f0011

    Thank you so much. :)

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  • DaoistNotAvilable
    DaoistNotAvilable1yr
    Respondeu a Olympu

    Thanks for the very detailed and critical review. Helps me a lot. I will go back and check the chapters for the grammatical errors again. no....i don't have a name generator. trying to come up with them from my imagination, and it is really very hard work :))

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  • DaoistNotAvilable
    DaoistNotAvilable1yr
    Respondeu a Olympu

    Thanks for the very detailed and critical review. Helps me a lot. I will go back and check the chapters for the grammatical errors again. no....i don't have a name generator. trying to come up with them from my imagination, and it is really very hard work :))

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  • DaoistNotAvilable
    DaoistNotAvilable1yr
    Respondeu a Luna_Frost_20

    You could try breaking down the paragraphs. Too many lines visually seem a lot for a reader. Also, there are a lot of different situations taking place in one chapter. Try separating the different segments with a line or something. For the reader it will become clearer, otherwise I was a bit confused when I read from one segment to another and suddenly couldn't connect. But really good start.

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    Enchanted - Echoing Souls
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  • DaoistNotAvilable
    DaoistNotAvilable1yr
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    The FL is pretty feisty, works hard and does exactly what she decides. Loved the way she just kicked all party-goers out of the house. The three kids of the benefactors have very clear personalities, and the relation between the FL and each of them is well portrayed. Very good work.

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    Being Repulished
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  • DaoistNotAvilable
    DaoistNotAvilable1yr
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    Will completely ignore the minor grammatical errors, since I found this to be a beautiful piece of writing. The frustrations and helplessness of the FL comes out so clearly through the various real and dream situations. The different relations and personal chemistry of the FL with different characters is well portrayed. Very good work.

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  • DaoistNotAvilable
    DaoistNotAvilable1yr
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    The detailing of the world is very good. Also the different characters and the different professions which might exist in such a world. A very good piece of work.

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  • DaoistNotAvilable
    DaoistNotAvilable1yr
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    I personally find the detailing a bit too heavy, but love the storyline. the characters are well defined, and sequences well spaced. would love to see more chapters. Good work.

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    Enchanted - Echoing Souls
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  • DaoistNotAvilable
    DaoistNotAvilable1yr
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    The story is very hardcore and gripping right from the beginning. in a post apocalyptic world, how people survive and live on from day-to-day is very well written, also giving space to their emotions and frustrations. Very good work.

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  • DaoistNotAvilable
    DaoistNotAvilable1yr
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    Beautiful detailing of the world and story backdrop. the story is fast paced, and a lot of things keep happening right from the start, keeping the readers on their toes. Hope to see more chapters soon.

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    Gricard System in the Apocalypse
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  • DaoistNotAvilable
    DaoistNotAvilable1yr
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    Loved the chemistry between the FL and her system, it's hilarious. the FL is witty and decisive, making the story more and more interesting as it progresses. like your style of writing, very sharp and has a smooth rhythm. Very good work.

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    Quick Transmigration: Enthrallment
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  • DaoistNotAvilable
    DaoistNotAvilable1yr
    Respondeu a 1AM

    Has returned back to normal, but i get your point. will go back and add the details.

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  • DaoistNotAvilable
    DaoistNotAvilable1yr
    Respondeu a Sujay_Majumdar

    Thank you :))

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  • DaoistNotAvilable
    DaoistNotAvilable1yr
    Respondeu a blossoms_hkhk

    Thank you so much. :)

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  • DaoistNotAvilable
    DaoistNotAvilable1yr
    Respondeu a 1AM

    Thank you so much for the great review. :)

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  • DaoistNotAvilable
    DaoistNotAvilable1yr
    Respondeu a Sweet_Vanilla553

    Thanks for the great review. :)

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  • DaoistNotAvilable
    DaoistNotAvilable1yr
    Respondeu a AmoreMimosi_001

    Thank you so much. :)

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  • DaoistNotAvilable
    DaoistNotAvilable1yr
    Respondeu a MelodicSnow

    Thanks for the in-depth review. :)

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  • DaoistNotAvilable
    DaoistNotAvilable1yr
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    I found the way the story started off to be quite interesting and funny. Like the FL a lot - her expressions, her internal dilemmas.....very funny and relatable. Should go back and edit the chapters already uploaded. some minor mistakes in punctuations and word capitalizations. Keep up the good work. :)

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    Bloody Saint
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